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His whisper sounded like an ocean, void:
If you don't live for something,
you will die for nothing.

His breath smelled of expensive lies.

If you don't live for something,
is life valuable?
His breath smelled of expensive lies
bought with years of emptiness.

Life is valuable?
I can't help imagining the future
bought with years of emptiness -
moral whores silenced for peace.

I can't help imagining the future...
You, you will die for nothing.
Moral whores are silenced for this peace,
and I saw it all in his ocean void, his whisper.
©2009 ~lorananirren
:iconlorananirren:

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For ~TheChamele0n, though he's not on da often anymore. I was supposed to write this...gosh, two years ago? for my 1800th pageview. It's a little late, but I never forget something I said I'd do. I've kept the messages for that journal in my inbox all this time lol. So here it is! Finally!

The request was to write a pantoum using the following prompt: If you don't live for something, you'll die for nothing.

If it's not obvious I have Watchmen on the brain with this poem, you obviously don't know Watchmen, so check it out! DO IT! xD

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:iconlikescarecrows:
I have yet to see or read Watchmen, but Im working on both of those things :D

Very nice, I really like this. "His breath smelled of expensive lies."

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Don't mess with me, I know karate!

And sushi!

And a few other Japanese words.
:iconlorananirren:
xD

Thanks very much!

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The void breathed hard on my heart, turning its illusions to ice, shattering them. --Rorschach, Watchmen
:iconlorananirren:
You saw it! I'm so glad! ^__^ Yeah, this wasn't the first one I came up with, but I couldn't find the original one, and frankly this one is much better.

--
The void breathed hard on my heart, turning its illusions to ice, shattering them. --Rorschach, Watchmen
:iconlorananirren:
Thanks very much :)

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The void breathed hard on my heart, turning its illusions to ice, shattering them. --Rorschach, Watchmen
:iconthechamele0n:
I've finally watched Watchmen. Now it makes more sense.
I have to add just one thing to my previous comment:
Win! :)
:iconlorananirren:
I'm so glad you watched it and you liked it so much ^_^ Did you read the novel too though? It's soooo much better!

Now I have to reread this poem and see what prompted you to say that lol.

:hug:

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The void breathed hard on my heart, turning its illusions to ice, shattering them. --Rorschach, Watchmen

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